#1
Writtem about 1 1/2 years ago, in light emotion to make myself forget an ex

I Think of you but I don't have to smile
I don't feel the need to see you
I kissed your picture yesterday night
Today I throw it in the fire

But I don't care for love
It's just emotional pain and too much for me
And I hope that when it's over
I will never love again

The thought of you with me upsets my desire
To be eternally happy
And when I see roses I just think of pain
That thorns and loving can be

Chorus

And now I finish this song on a thought
And I hope that it makes you smile
For I will be leaving forever tonight
No I don't think I will be back

Chorus
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#2
Quote by Lacquer_Head
Writtem about 1 1/2 years ago, in light emotion to make myself forget an ex

I Think of you but I don't have to smile
I don't feel the need to see you
I kissed your picture yesterday night
Today I throw it in the fire
Nice line, good flow even with the lack of obvious rhyming.

But I don't care for love
It's just emotional pain and too much for me
And I hope that when it's over
I will never love again
Kinda weird line, makes me feel a bit sad, but also it kinda made me laugh.

The thought of you with me upsets my desire
To be eternally happy
And when I see roses I just think of pain
That thorns and loving can be
GOOD LINE, the reference to roses is fairly cliche but i think you made it work.

Chorus

And now I finish this song on a thought
And I hope that it makes you smile
For I will be leaving forever tonight
No I don't think I will be back
Nice kinda ending, sums it all up, and projects the message youre sending very well.

Chorus


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#4
Quote by AAA_the_band
Nice job, if you have time, can you check out mine? the links in the sig if you have time.

thx

AAA pretty much summed it up here.

And can someone please check out my song, too? Its in the link.
#5
I like it..I think it should be only piano and vocals, mixed with a tiny bit of acoustic guitar. Kind of like Trent Reznors/Nine inch nails - 'Something I can never have'