#1
this is kinda a emoish/punk song...i made it to fit a guitar peice of mine(punk of course),but i think it sounds fine,and i like it...tel me what you think...


verse 1

dragging my legs across the floor,
im still hungover from the night before,
i can barley even remember last night,
i dont even know if we got in a fight,

i never no whats going on,
but i dont regret the things ive done,
if you dont like these things,
why dont you just leave me...?


verse 2

its gone on for too long,havent you seen?,
the arguments,and the fights every week,
the parties with guys i hate,
you drive me crazy and irate...

(chorus)

im no longer there,for you to hold,
im not the person you grab when your cold,
but remember its alright,
just dont be the bitch who starts the fight,

(verse 3)

late nights on the phone,
yelling about the things we found out,
we never worked together to solve our problems,
so dont try now,im to prone,

(chorus 2)

im no longer there,to be the one who cares,
im not gonna be that guy,
that type who likes to lie,
im jus gonna walk away,
away from all this pain,

(verse 4)

its the end of the night and no1s home,
im the one you tlk to on the phone,
the problems arnt solved, so its not alright,
just remember oyur the one who started the fight,

(guitar break down part)

(end)

dragging my legs across the floor,
im still hungover from the night before,
i dont think i did to much last night,
i never wish we had that fight...
What new friends will the day bring?

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#2
not bad, just make sure you play it over a faster tempo or it could sound cheezy. crit for crit? my latest is called jersey devil.
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#3
yea i plan to play it over a fast tempo...
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#4
I don't think it's bad so to say, but a couple things could come off cheesy with the wrong delivery, like the guy said before... I don't really think the "if you dont like these things,
why dont you just leave me...?" line fits that well, it's not a bad thought though... I think it has some potential, maybe change a few things? IDK.. it's your call... good effort though.

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#5
yea i wrote it in like 10 min, i plan on changin some stuff...
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