#1
My baby had two bown eyes
And when she was sad they always cried
She's a puzzle to me
Sometimes I can't make her happy
But no matter how hard I always try

Chorus:This girls wreckin' my mind
We hate each other and are unkind
We say we'll move on but never can
We don't understand love is a waste of our time

I always treat my baby real nice
But sometimes we get into real rough fights
I try not to cause much pain
Last time I hit her and things changed
I'm not sure if things will be alright

Chorus

Chorus

Oh baby you say you'll leave but never do
You pack and say we're through
Then you have a change of heart
You come back like we've never been apart
Someday you'll leave and I hope you do

Chorus
#2
if this is played bluesy it could be really good, moved me a little with the "two brown eyes" part. wanna crit mine, its nothing like this but not bad, its called clear channel.
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#3
a song that deals with a rough relationship, very common... but that doesn't make this bad at all... I like how you go into details. The chorus is good for the most part I think, and the first verse or intro is solid as well.... Overall I'd say that it's a solid piece, and that I enjoyed reading it. What kind of style is this song played in, if you don't mind me asking?

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#4
I personally think it sounds fine, and the rhyming doesn't sound very forced. I agree that it would sound good to a bluesy rhythm. I think the first verse is the weakest of the three, but that might be because it has to set the song up...though I can't really see what makes it worse than the other two to me.
#5
I personally think it sounds crap, and the rhyming does sound very forced. I disagree that it would sound good to a bluesy rhythm. I think the first verse is the weakest of the three, but that might'n be because it has to set the song up...though I can't really see what makes it better than the other two to me.
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#7
It was written with blues rock in my mind
early Rolling Stones and Eric Clapton
#8
i liked it. i liked the verses the most. but the chorus was good too. Actually this reminds me of a song Everclear might write. i love everclear. i think itd be cool if you did this song like and everclear song. that would be awesome.

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