#1
hey guys pleaseeee let me know what you think, it feels iffy for me, i'm not sure but anyways, I will do a lot of critting asap tomorrow morning, I love you all and so does Jesus, God Bless<333


A Satellite Of My Past, And My Wishful Tomorrow.

V1:
So while you?re stuck in my mind, and hung over my head,
I?ll think back on the best of days,
Where you said you?re stuck on replay,
You said you just can?t stop thinking about what we did underneath that sky?.
On that pier underneath the bridge that took me straight to your house that night...

Chorus:
And when that satellite moved, and spelt our names in the milky way?
I knew everything we were was so right, I know you should?ve stayed..
So in the midst, I need you it seems?
And I hope that after all, you can?t love without me?

V2:
These days are just getting old, I need a little you in my life,
To tell you the secrets, mistakes to what I?ve done right..
So when you?re crying your heart out and earning another scar
I?m thinking and writing of how incredible you are?

Bridge:
And I?ll accidentally leave songs I wrote about you lying around,
Right where I know you?ll see them.
And I?ll treasure every moment, that I spend with you
Because girl, God knows, I need them..

Chorus:
And when that satellite moved, and spelt our names in the milky way?
I knew everything we were was so right, I know you should?ve stayed..
So in the midst, I need you it seems?
And I hope that after all, you can?t love without me?

End:
Say you can?t live without me?
#3
Sounds like Christian rock, I guess that's what you're going for, if you are, you did it well.

Could you crit my rap "Fate of the Lesser"please? The links in my sig. Thanks!