#1
From the Newest album

Raven?s Rage ? Zero (Edited)

{Intro; Zero?s Voice Speaking with no music}

Nothing really matters anymore
For when I spread my wings and learn to fly
The apocalypse shall fall

{Zero screaming and electric guitar}

YEAHHHHH!

I DON?T CARE ANYMORE
(FOR WHAT YOU DO)
I DON?T CARE ANYMORE
(WHAT GETS YOU THROUGH)
I DON?T CARE ANYMORE
(IF YOU LIVE OR DIE)

{Spoken in a deeper voice} Or really give a f*** what you say

I DON?T CARE ANYMORE
(ABOUT OUR PAST)
I DON?T SUPPORT ANYMORE
(YOU F***ED IT UP)
I DON?T LIVE ANYMORE
(JUST BECAUSE OF YOU)
I WONT DIE ANYMORE
(TO GET YOU THROUGH)
I DON?T GIVE ANYMORE
(TO THE FATHER)
I DON?T WANT ANYMORE
(FROM YOU THROUGH AND THROUGH)

(chorus)

BUT NOTHING REALLY MATTERS NOW
BECAUSE OF YOU
NOTHING MATTERS NOW
TO GET ME THROUGH
SPREAD MY WINGS AND LEARN TO FLY
YOUR DAYS ARE NUMBERED NOW


KEEP F***IN? WITH ME
(YOU WILL GET YOURS)
I DON?T WANT YOU TO BLEED
(JUST TO DIE)
I WON?T CARE ANYMORE
(IF YOU DIE)
NOTHING REALLY MATTERS ANYMORE
BECAUSE YOU F***ED IT UP AGAIN!

{Music slows down a little bit to a darker sound}

You think that you control me
But I hold all the cards
You think that you will own me
But I am the one holding the leash
You think I will give you mercy
But when you least expect it?.
AHHHHH! HANG YOU LIKE YOU DID ME

YEAHHHH! HAHAHAHA!

{CHORUS AND SOLO}

YEAHHHHHH! AHHHHHH!

HA HA HA.


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That is about it tell me what you think.
#2
Not too bad, but I recommend you don't use all caps even if it's being screamed or yelled, just cuz people don't take you seriously.

Good work, crit mine?
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=398258
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#3
wow really hard core...i like it! keep on keepin on.....finnaly people posting screamo kinda stuff on here!
peace out!
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#5
The whole song is basically about my anger towards people. I am just a pinned up built up, fed up, agression just needed to totally explode. I made so many stupid a** ballads i and rougher punkly songs. I didnt lyk them because this was my original style of music that i wrote. IT was taken off because it was so controversial on my meaning and people thought i was evil and demented. And actually insane.


Anyway thanks.
#7
It is a draft of what i want in my next album. I am rethinking about doing this song over or something. But the album should have alot of this style. Alot of heavy guitars, just alot of flow. Later.