#1
As these feelings of love glide away out of reach
I sense something new taking over full of each
And every one of the words you said to me

This moment's taking way too f**king long
And i know that somethings wrong
I know i shouldnt but i keep holding on

Just tell me one thing
Why did it take so long to
Say that you didnt love me
Its not like i never knew
I just kept it to myself

Well are you f**king happy now
Is this what you were hoping for
To let me down again just like before

Is everything the way you want it now
Im out of your way now so
Dont worry about me im just lost and alone

Just tell me one thing
Why did it take so long to
Say that you didnt love me
Its not llike i never knew
I just kept it to myself
#3
"And i know that somethings wrong" sounds like it needs another syllable.

Also "I just kept it to myself" seems somewhat out of place, but thats just me reading it, with music its probably better.

Anyways, really good piece, I can relate to it and that's really the point isn't it?
#4
not bad, I think you might need to tighten up some of the lines... for example, the first verse could go... "All these feelings of love gliding out of reach, I sense something new taking over each and every word that you said to me".. I think that sounds a little better, but it's your call ultimately. I think the last part is the best...
#5
thanks u 2for your opinions
i see where u guys r coming from and
i will definately look into it
#6
It is well written and thought out well. Some points are a little awkward but overall is good stuff. keep it up