#1
Hope dies as a last resort

Never lived a realistic life,
tried to change all kinds of things
But tell me, when are you going to
set me free [set me free]

I never had a real world life just made me to
What I am now, some kind of strange
People looking at me as if, as if I were a fool
Maybe they are right with things they say [say]

Why can´t I get out of this wicked circumstances
This disolution brings me down

Try to grap, with my hand, for the crown?
Of which I would die for

Of which I would die for



I got no silence
Inside o? my head [Inside of my head]
Want to
break away [break away]

No-one can
Understand me [Understand me]
But that is not
surprising me ?? anymore

People always rated me to be sick, many problems I had to solve
I couldn´t get away from my hate [never]
I have inside myself, it has never been subdued, I can accept
That none likes such a person [person]

I always said to myself, hope dies as a last resort [last resort]

Out of reach,
nobody is helping me
To find my way,
all alone?

Try to solace my one
with a feeling of
sovereignty
But no more
hope?s is left
#4
Okay here goes!

Never lived a realistic life,
tried to change all kinds of things
But tell me, when are you going to
set me free [set me free]


First line: I like it, good opening.
Second line: I like it, but I may change it to "Tried to change many things"
Third line: I'd take out "But" and put in "So"
Fourth line: I like it, goes with 3rd line of course.

I never had a real world life just made me to
What I am now, some kind of strange
People looking at me as if, as if I were a fool
Maybe they are right with things they say [say]


First line: I don't really like this line actually. I think I get what your trying to say, I just don't like how it got put together. Here's an example: "I never had that picture perfect smile"
Second line: I do like it. However I think it could benefit from being worded different. Such as "All I am now, is something strange"
Third line: I actually don't like how it repeats part there. I always write without repeating spots to begin with, then when I start to sing it, I add in whatever when/where I feel necessary. It could go well as "They look at me, say I'm a fool"
Fourth line: It's good.

Why can´t I get out of this wicked circumstances
This disolution brings me down


First line: Instead of "this", put "these".
Second line: It's alright.

Try to grap, with my hand, for the crown?
Of which I would die for


First line: I think "grap" is supposed to be either "grasp" or "grab", which one? Lol. I'd put grasp if one or the other. I don't know if I like "with my hand". I may put "Reaching out, I try to grasp for the crown".
Second line: Instead of "Of", I'd put "For"

Of which I would die for

Again, "For" lol



I got no silence
Inside o? my head [Inside of my head]
Want to
break away [break away]


First line: It's alright, but I'd put "I have nothing but silence". When people say "I got no", it sounds very, well, hickish lol.
Second line: That's fne.
Third line: Fine again, but maybe put I want to, maybe not.
Fourth line: Fine again.

No-one can
Understand me [Understand me]
But that is not
surprising me ?? anymore


First line: Good
Second line: Alright
Third line: Good again
Fourth line: Sounds great


People always rated me to be sick, many problems I had to solve
I couldn´t get away from my hate [never]
I have inside myself, it has never been subdued, I can accept
That none likes such a person [person]


First line: I'd shorten it a bit. Maybe to: "People rate me to be sick, many problems I had (or have) to solve.
Second line: It's alright.
Third line: A little long again. Maybe "It's been inside, never been subdued"
Fourth line: It's okay.

I always said to myself, hope dies as a last resort [last resort]

I'd change "I" to "I've". And the rest of the line is okay.

Out of reach,
nobody is helping me
To find my way,
all alone?


First line: Alright
Second line: It's ok too
Third line: Good
Fourth line: I'd change it to "I'm all alone"

Try to solace my one
with a feeling of
sovereignty
But no more
hope?s is left


First line: It's ok
Second line: Good
Third line: One word, rock on! I like the one word lines here and there.
Fourth line: I'd change to "But never again"
Fifth line: I'd take out "'s" on hope's, since you have "is". So it would be "hope is left"

Nice long song. It's nice to see someone who can keep going on it.
#5
I like it. I mean It wasn't great but in no way bad, just ok. The way you wrote...I don't know it just kinda bored me. It my just be me. It was good but I think you can be better. The best thing about this song is the length. Like loud said nice to see people who can keep on going