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any critique no matter how brutally harsh and honest is well appreciated, if this helps i'm 14 and started writing lyrics 3 months ago and these are my 5th set. no melody yet.

psychotic pleasure

all day, all night, a submission to your senses
tired of seeing nothing but shadows on my wall
tired of feeling nautious, like sea sickness
constantly trying to prove something, waiting for my call.

spur of the moment, simultanous movements
a sense of pleasure, psychadelic enjoyment
oh i would like to lie to you
i would like to decieve you
and maybe if youre too scared,
maybe somehow recieve you

your erotic thoughts are mine to satisfy
psychotic pleasures and affections of lust
explain your desire, look in my eye
all it is, is an agreement for us

spur of the moment, simultanous movements
a sense of pleasure, psychadelic enjoyment
oh i would like to lie to you
i would like to decieve you
and maybe if youre too scared,
maybe somehow recieve you

so will you take me down to our paradise
take me down, take me down rough
make me feel, the numbness from ecstacy
a seventh heaven for you and me
your erotic thoughts are mine to satisfy
psychotic pleasures and affections of lust
explain your desire, look in my eye
all it is, is an agreement for us

spur of the moment, simultanous movements
a sense of pleasure, psychadelic enjoyment
oh i would like to lie to you
i would like to decieve you
and maybe if youre too scared,
maybe somehow recieve you
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