#1
something i came up with last night

All That I Hold Dear

You know what?
NO!
I can't take this crap anymore.
I'm tired of all the bull****
no more!

Am I damned to destroy all I hold dear?

I hate this
the way I feel about you.
I'm sorry but this is just to much to take anymore.
I'm going to end it all here tonight.
TONIGHT!
and I dont think you'll care
just let me do it!

Am I damned to destroy all I hold dear?
ALL-I-HOLD-DEAR

Let my lungs fill with this blood from my shattered heart.
I didnt want to do this, end it this way, but you let me no choice.(Its all your fault!)
destroying all I hold dear
but I'm sick and tired.
I cant hurt if i dont love(Never Again!)
so I'll destroy all I hold dear.

Am I damned to destroy all I hold dear?

They cant hear you scream, no one can help you now.
My dear...goodnight.
This is my last goodbye(GOODBYE!)before the gun goes off
and the paramedics come rushing in.
I didnt see the phone off the hook.

Am I DAMNED!!!!

Smoking gun in hand
blood drenched bodies hit the floor
a higher body count whats the point?
I love the sight, smell, TASTE!
Another shot in the night, right through the heart

Murder suicide is what the cops called it...
Happy Valentines day my dear.
#2
for the most part i don't think the words in parenthesis added anything to it, i would just leave them out. at the end of the second verse thing i think you could drop the 'just let me do it!'.
I love the sight, smell, TASTE!-- that didn't really have to do with anything else in the poem.

I didnt see the phone off the hook.-- personally i didnt understand what this line meant.

anyways this was just as good as most of the stuff on the forum. personally i thought it was a bit too emo. crit mine if youd like

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=400110
I've seen emo-er.


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