#1
more of my beutiful poetry.

(*pens click*)
(loud guitar stuff here!)

I LIKE TO CLICK PENS
(NENENENENENE!)
CLICKING PENS IS FUN
(NENENENENENE!)
I DONT LIKE TO EAT HENS
(NENENENENENE!)
THIS IS NOT A PUNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!!!!

YOU EVIL CHICKEN EATER
(NENENENENENE!)
I'LL MAIM YOUR FACE WITH AN EGGBEATER
(NENENENENENE!)
THIS EVIL SLAUGHTERHOUSE
(NENENENENENE!)
IS NOT A PLACE OF RESIDENCE
(NENENENENENE!)
ITS NOT A FRIGGIN HOME FOR JUST A FRIGGIN MOUSE!!!!!

BUT I'M SO FAT AND LAZY
(NENENENENENE!)
AND EVEN SOMEWHAT CRAZY
(NENENENENENE!)
SO PATHETIC WONT GO PAST THE FENCE
(NENENENENENE!)
I WONT MAKE A FRIGGIN DIFFERENCE.....

(solo thing...)

i'll just click my pen...
#2
two things... one, I liked the other one much better... this one seems forced and the rhyming is predictable, and you use the same noises inbetween lines as the other one.... secondly, you should read the rules... you're only allowed to post one song a day, and two each week.... so, they're gonna make you delete one of these...
#5
Quote by a-user-name
two things... one, I liked the other one much better... this one seems forced and the rhyming is predictable, and you use the same noises inbetween lines as the other one.... secondly, you should read the rules... you're only allowed to post one song a day, and two each week.... so, they're gonna make you delete one of these...

ah. but, (nenenenene!) is just a symbol of any instruments doing anything.
#9
Quote by MastaBassist10
What the hell are you on?

And where can I get some?


Yah seriously.lol
#12
here's the most beutiful song evar

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i'll smite you all
you WILL be smited
into the spikepit you'll fall
by a dog be bited
smite!
you!
smite!
you!

(guitars, bass, drums, that stuff-nenenenenenenenenenene!)

i'm at my cauldron
chanting a cliche-ish spell
(nenenenene!)
you should start to run
before i send you straight to hell
(nenenenene!)

but wait-i like you
you took the bullet named bird poo

(short solo-ish bridge-y thing here)

i'll be nice, cuz your nice
here's some free beans n rice
your death'll be quick and painless
and your corpse wont even be much of a mess

smite!
you!
smite!
you!
Last edited by sadist_squirrel at Jul 24, 2006,
#13
^Quit posting that everywhere, or I'll have to report you.
Quote by dakmac
Yah seriously.lol

Hey, I forgot to ask you in the PM, can I get a link to your new song (unless its "Embracing Lonliness", I've already critiqued that one)? Thanks
#15
Is it a spoof cause I dont see it being anything els.
in the midst of tears an sorrows when the anger slips aside are the fears of tomorrow where the loneliness resides
#17
Quote by sadist_squirrel
Why Must Everyone Report Everyone!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I Made This Thread Goddammit!!!

A few reasons:
1) You're posting your "song" everywhere, instead of just giving us a link.
2) You're obnoxious.
3) I don't like you and/or I'm an asshole.
#19
Quote by sadist_squirrel
yes. youre an asshole. i'm obnoxious and take pride in that. and how the f**k do i put a link in my sig?

Copy the link from the address bar, and put it in your signature, or a post if you want someone to read it, as part of a "crit for crit" deal.
#24
wow-can't believe i wasted three minutes reading every single comment . . .
dude - if i was stoned, i would die laughing listening to your song
#25
ahh... the nene's are the music... it's probably not the best idea to put it in the lyrics then, since it easily causes confusion (as in my case). You'd probably be better off leaving a blank line inbetween lines, since that'll convey the same idea that there is music inbetween lines. As for the reporting, I wouldn't report you, but you really shouldn't post your songs in someone elses song thread... get your link working, and do that..
#27
here is my new song cuz i cant post a new thread:

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The Metallica Sucks Song

Why does metallica suck?
You used to go and see em for 80 bucks
They used to be cooler than secret-agent chimps
But now they?re just a bunch of sissy wimps

Why does james always go ?huua!?
And why does lars have to make him cry
They should name their next album ?waah!?
And just prey to the devil fans might buy
They were even cool with their stupid mullets
But now they have to dodge their old fans? bullets
Yeah, metallica?s lost all their coolness
The old metallica in peace will rest.

Even the emos are better now
Whining like the babies they are
Cuz if the old metallica?s resurrected
The new ones won?t have to be dissected

Join me in my obnoxious protest
By making metallica play old crap at ozzfest
And boycott any concert that says ?st. anger? or ?dirty window?
Cuz a better singer for them would be the teletubby ?po?

Metallica!

Sucks!

To see the old ones!

I?d pay 500 bucks!

JAMES AND LARS ARE CRYBABIES!!!!! ( [<yelled real fast] ).

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

**************************************************
that's genius.
#30
hmmmmm . . .
that song was a little better than the first
i happen to be a metallica fan, but i do agree that the newer stuff they've produced has definately lost its edge - its a shame
#34
Quote by MastaBassist10
^Now that wasn't so bad at all, except at the end. Next time, give it its own thread, and read the rules.

dude, how can you not worship my first one???
#35
Quote by loudmurder
Fighting how, then crying how?

like this. rough image. strange.

james: "now we're gonna play my new song even tho it sux, and we're gonna sell millions of records with it."

lars: "but my ego's still recovering from when my dad said my song sucked!"

james: "well, you're a poopyface"

lars: "no i'm not! wawawaawah! i dont like you anymore!"

james: "but i thought we were friends! waaaaaaaaaah!!!!!!!!"

etc...
#36
Quote by MastaBassist10
^Now that wasn't so bad at all, except at the end. Next time, give it its own thread, and read the rules.

i cant, cuz i posted this the day i posted my first song (the best evar-displayed on my myspace blog page), and the first was deleted, so now i have to wait six mor f**king days to post more beauty.
#38
where would i make a club? the pit? it's the " 'people who think metallica used to rock but know that they now suck cuz they know they can get away with it and have addicts buying their cd's just cuz it says metallica' club". you're all invited. no, i'll make something cool. you're still invited cuz your the first people to not throw random insults at me/report me for tiny s**t on this site.
#39
Quote by loudmurder
soldier> I feel the same, but if you think about it, they went at it soo long. They'd eventually run out of the good stuff someday lol.

yeah you do have a point there