#1
crit for crit. be sure to tell me what lines you think work and what lines you think dont. thanks!

I don't want to do anything
If it wont change the pace
everything's the same, everyday
watch as i run in place
no place to go, no job, no future
don't know a single thing for sure
waste my time watching TV
just like the day before

(chorus)
I can?t get away
from this routine
it's killin' me
the repitition never ends
every single day
I wake up pissed
with all of this
I can?t escape this hole I?m in

Never really do anything
sleep in til 1 o'clock
i don't really care anyways
who really gives a fock?
no friends to call, no plans, not today
Wish i could get up and get away
Sit around and watch the clock
just like yesterday

CHORUS


Everyday I sit and wait for something new
A victim of boredom, what can I do? x2


CHORUS
I've seen emo-er.


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#4
everything's the same, everyday
watch as i run in place
no place to go, no job, no future
don't know a single thing for sure

everyday looks like it's been added for flow yet it actually minimizes flow. Future and sure won't rhyme no matter how much you try.

Never really do anything
sleep in til 1 o'clock
i don't really care anyways
who really gives a fock?
no friends to call, no plans, not today
Wish i could get up and get away


Again the flow and the pure cheesiness of 'fock'...


The chorus is a little cliche particulary the pissed in a hole bit. Maybe try writing about what you're writing about but from a different perspective allowing you to use more powerful imagery and originality. These lyrics have been done too much... Not meaning to be rude.

no friends to call, no plans, not today
Wish i could get up and get away

best two lines in it.