#1
Basically this is the first song i've written, its mainly indie and punk orientated, influences like graham coxon and the jam, but its just a draft and i may add some more to it. Tell me what you think. Also the title may need changing. Anyway, here goes.

Verse 1
You?re just on repeat
I?m bored with your routine
Like a thousand pairs of feet
How many times we?ve seen

Dull as dishwater
Every day?s the same
We?re all just data
Given number not a name

Chorus
Nothing is changing
Just modern city life
A rut that needs breaking
With a razor sharp knife

Out of normality
Just something else to do
Sorry to say darling
I just got bored of you

Verse 2
Wander the same streets
Seen it all before
Minding my own business
Abiding by the law

Its doin? my head in
Walking here with you
Same old place, same old people
Just give me something new

Chorus
Nothing is changing
Just modern city life
A rut that needs breaking
With a razor sharp knife

Out of normality
Just something else to do
Sorry to say darling
I just got bored of you
Last edited by bettyswollox at Jul 25, 2006,
#2
i liek the idea

fav. line: "Dull as dishwater"

but i think a better title for the song would be O.C.D.

but its your song...just a suggestion...

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#4
Sorry to bump this thread but its just really important to me and the best thing i can get is feedback from musicians like yourselves. Cheers guys in advance!