#1
i will melt you with the songs i play
as long as you promise your here to stay
i will let your conscience teach you to fly
as long as you promise you won't lie
when i said i didnt care
i didnt mean it i swear
i wish you would say your here forever
stay with me we can be together
i want you all for myself
stay with me theres nobody else
but you
i will savoir the love that you give to me
as long as you hold mine presciously
i will let you out on your own
as long as you say that youll come home
when i said i didnt care
i didnt mean it i swear
i wish you would say your here forever
stay with me we can be together
i want you all for myself
stay with me theres nobody else
but you
i love the way you smile
ive never felt so good in my life
stay with me
stay with me
i wish you would say your here forever
stay with me we can be together
i want you all for myself
stay with me theres nobody else but you...


go easy on me its the first song ive written!
#2
"Stay With Me" is a song by the Faces. And a good one at that.

Just letting you know.
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#3
It sounds like a kelly clarkson type song, but it doesnt really have much of a meaning...
i would use more imagery....and try to split the song into verses and choruses and bridges...it makes it easier to understand

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Subtle Arrogance

Do you realize, that i can clearly see your clitoris through your jeans?

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#4
Quote by noah22791
"Stay With Me" is a song by the Faces. And a good one at that.

Just letting you know.


In the morning dont say you love me cause ill only kick you outta the door
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