#1
guitar intro
Why do I get this feeling?
(Whenever I'm around you)
Sometimes i cant even breathe
(whenever I'm around you)
I know that this feeling
(Whenever i'm around you)
Must mean im in love

Chorus:
I've gotta let you know
It shouldnt surprise you
i just cant stop myself
i'm fallin head over heels

Verse 2:
Your scent sends my stomach lurching
(Whenever I'm around you)
Your voice makes my heart ache
(Whenever I'm around you)
I know that this feeling
(Whenever i'm around you)
Must mean that im in love

Chorus:
I've gotta let you know
it shouldnt surprise you
i jsut cant stop myself
i'm fallin head over heels

Guitar solo

Verse 3:
You're on my mind all the time
(Whenever i'm around you)
Theres no way i can concentrate
(Whenever i'm around you)
Now i know that this feeling
(Whenever I'm around you)
must mean that im in love

Chorus:
I've gotta let you know
it shouldnt surprise you
i jsut cant stop myself
i'm fallin head over heels
i've gotta let you know
it shouldnt surprise you
i just cant stop myself
i'm fallin in love with you

guitar outro
#2
erm the chorus needs the whenever im around u part in it, prolly at the end twice, or maybe the backing vox cd do it in the background while the lead singer sings the 4 chorus lines... that mite work quite well.. its a nice line too. i like the repetetive "must be in love" part too. gd song for a 1st try, hope no one gives u **** or calls u 12 cause its "pussy". peace.

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#4
tiz a reele good love song for a first attempt. . . i found it kinda simple tho. . . nothing too special or amazing about it. . . . try maby more in depth descritions about the feeling. . . love is the most amazing thing in the world. . . let that show in ur writing. . . . oh and the line "Your scent sends my stomach lurching" i could be wrong but the seems like ur saying the person smells bad and makes tem want to through up. . . . .
So for a first attempt i give it a solid 7.5/10 just work on your imagery and how u portray what your writting about.
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#5
yeah about that scent thing. i wanted to say something about the feeling i get when i smell his cologne but i didnt know how to put that. if you have any ideas plz let me know. thanks for the help