#1
helo, tel me what you think of this one. crit4crit.

thanx


Little Danger

Well jailbird rocker/ shes got something to hide
keeps her finger on the trigger/ aint along for the ride
but you see its all the same to me
if there's a spark in her eyes
cause I aint having none/ of no-ones cherry pie

Im a real quick learner/ looking better dressed in red
so you dont go until I say/ an I say
you dont go until Im dead

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun

Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come

Dont wake up boy/ and start seein red
you got the wrong girl/ in someone elses bed
said youd stick to your guns
but it was plain to me
that youd take what you could/ if it was easy to reach

Im a real quick learner/ looking better dressed in red
so you dont go until I say/ an I say
you dont go until Im dead

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun
Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come

Well listen to me, I got something to say

Solo

bridge:
Memories whipping through my hair
they take me away to the other side
where they say the grass is greener
but only time will tell

I wrote my vices on a wall
said theyll take me to the top
now dont you get excited/ Ive already been and gone
you want to tie me to the rails/ but Im headed for the top
so dont rain on my parade
cause its not me whos lost the plot

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun
Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come

Ill sit on the floor/ a guitar by my knees
Ill write about drink/ an anything I please
the fires burning bright in me
an now youre gonna see
watch me get up and go/ live out my rock n roll dream

Im a real quick learner/ looking better dressed in red
so you dont go until I say/ an I say
you dont go until Im dead

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun
Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come
Well listen up now, hear my famous last words

Solo

Not so long now, til I drive away
take the long way, out down the highway
and if you should freeze frame this scene
an look out beyond the screen
youd wanna be so far away
a million miles from what I see
well read my lips, I dont mind
I dont need you chastising me

She asked me to explain myself
though I dont know right from wrong
so dont you start your crying/ now move on from what youve lost
cause I dont want sex or love/ just rock n roll
so dont rain on my parade
cause you wont ever be alone

Im a real quick learner/ looking better dressed in red
so you dont go until I say/ an I say
you dont go until Im dead

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun
Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come

Im a real quick learner/ aint jumping into bed
so you dont go until I say/ an I say
you dont go until Im dead

Get up, little danger, little fun
like it or not, I aint giving it up
Look out, little danger, little fun
not lookin for love, just a-needing your fun
Next stop, heaven,
Little danger, little fun
if we need a lil danger to get a lil fun
this cant be a sign
of better things to come
#3
argh wall of song!!!!!!!!!!! It's really good though, I love the lyrics but it took me forever to read through them, and i think it'd be good if you could figure out a way to shorten it a little... you don't want people to get bored with the song before it's finished :P but on the other hand they're great lyrics so maybe it wouldn't get boring anyway
#4
hey man that is really good. It has good rhyme and seems very rocknroll. It was one of those that i just had playin in my head while i was reading it. My only problem is that it was a little lengthy. Maybe you could split it into two songs or just do somethin special with it? whatever. Anyway great job on this 1.
#7
You remind me a little of the Stooges but I can tell you love Aerosmith. Classic rock song if not a little unoriginal. It's creative though.
#8
Ya this screams "ROCK N ROLL" Its actually a refreshing piece compared to the darker lyrics thats been comin through here lately, which I too am guilty of.And though its a long read,Im sure when played,its obout 4 minutes or so. At first I wasnt too keen on how many time s you say fun in the chorus but by the time I got to the end it didnt sound so bad. I dont usually rate ...but this is an eazy 8. I think this has actually inspired me to get back to basics and write a good ol rock song....nice work.......my latest is "Fly High" still on the first page last chkd if you wanna crit it , Id appreciate it.