#1
allo everyone who gives a damn anough to take the time and read this. . . thank you for getting this far. . . .this song was the first song i ever fully wrote. . . some personal meaning. . . but please please (note 2 pleases) crit this, i'm in need of the help.

Let Me Save You

Nowhere to run
Nowhere to hide
Her formless beauty
Stalked by my pride
Out in the open
In the reflection of mirrors
Shadows seek light
You will never shed a tear

(Chorus)

Let me . . .
Take you away on my wings of light
When you stumble and fall I will take flight
Let my kiss heal your pain
Feel this cleansing rain
Your fears are my enemy
You demons my slain

Let. Me. Save. You.

Tumbling down
I fear to catch
Will she fall into my arms
Or will darkness snatch
Away, her from my heart
I will go after you there
Into the dark
For in the puzzle of my life
You are the only missing part

(Chorus)

My life I will give
If only to see your face
Your savior I will never siece to be
Your presence is all I wish to receive
Let me see your light and your soul
I?ll show you my void, this gapping hole
Without light there are no shadows
Be my light
For I am already you shadow

(Chorus x2)
And My Soul From Out That Shadow That Lies Floating On The Floor, Shall Be Lifted. . . Nevermore.
The Raven -Edgar Allen Poe
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#2
Not bad for a first song. I liked it. It seemed to lose flow in some parts, but other than that it was excellent. I love the wording throughout the song. Keep up the good work. By the way, what kind of genre would this be?

Crit mine please

Idol Worship
#3
i was thinkin Power Metal. . . it's my main influence so i guess i write stuff more towards that genre. . . .and shur i'll take a look at ur work. . . thanks for the crit
And My Soul From Out That Shadow That Lies Floating On The Floor, Shall Be Lifted. . . Nevermore.
The Raven -Edgar Allen Poe
(\__/)
(='.'=)
(")_(")
<<<<<<<<IT'S A FREAKIN BUNNY!O.o