#1
A song about a theory that the earth is hollow and may have many different things going on inside it. Many so holes that never ended but never went in them, their was a thought of sun being inside the earths core. Their was thought of people being down below earth that were more advanced than us and would soon kill us when they came to the surface. Some thought you would be blinded by the people underground because you could not see anything at all, which they were blind as well. This was written farely quick but listened to Am Coast to Coast for three hours on this strange probarly bs topic. Crit for Crit as well.


Hollow Earth

Verse
-Come follow these holes to the bottom
Reach the following
Transpire Generations
So you may come to *fall

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
To be blinded

Bridge
-Take these naturals
And stand in darkness
To be lighted by a locked sun

Interlude
+Don?t fall you be engulfed
And only assumed lost
To the above

Chorus-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
To be blinded

Verse
-Consumption of living is forbidden here
No need of sight
For the darkness is always a veil
Welcoming and discontent *easily

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
To be blinded

Bridge 2
*Fearful and pitiful many will become
If this is true and magnificent

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
To be blinded


- sung in middle range voice
* growled vocals
+ head voice vocals
#2
I think it's a pretty awesome concept. I think you should use some of the things you said at the top of the song and say them at the start of the song as a spoken intro. pretty awesome though
#3
good **** dude, i can't tell you to change anything really because you must have wrote it that way for a reason.... but I expecially like the way you wrote it for us with the key in the bottom and everything be centered and put were it belongs... its a good song.... but hey is the center of the earth just molten rock?
If you want to shine like the sun first you must burn like it.
#4
NONONONO - NO!

The middle of the earth is solid not moltern /slap
and geology will also tell you that the earth is in fact, not hollow.

But the song was good
Quote by the bartender
^ this man knows his stuff.
#5
Okay heres a revision

Revision 1- Hollow Earth

Verse
-Come follow these holes to the bottom
And reach the unheard
Transpire Generations
So you may come to *fall

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking,
Echo through the tunnel


Bridge
-Take these naturals
And stand in darkness
To be locked in by a dim sun

Interlude
+Don?t fall you'll be engulfed
And only assumed lost
-/+To the above

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
Echo through the tunnel

Verse
-Consumption of animal is forbidden here
For these people a head of our time

Verse
-There is no need of sight
For the darkness is always a veil
Welcoming and Sparse

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
Echo through the tunnel

Bridge 2
*Fearful and pitiful many will become
If this is true and magnificent
+They rise, *you'll crumble and decay

Chorus
-Meet the lights
Close the doors
And hear the talking
Echo through the tunnel
Blind yourself and you will be heard
And accepted


- sung in middle range voice
* growled vocals
+ head voice vocals