#1
The first bullets in me was pt. 1... so enjoy.(Which is obivious from this title.)

seven shots in him, them haterz came and got him
all he heard was shots around him
and his whole family worries about him
he got shot over a girl, a chick dat gave him a new world
no new words to desribe his heart in hurt
seven shots put his face in the dirt
and he got hit by sum nigs dat wanted him merked
but he thinking he still lives, came real close to getting killed
dem shots are like stab wounds in his head
he thought was alive until he realize he was already dead
he didn't make the hospital, didn't even survive dat last shot from the pistol
#2
i do like some rap, and i am open minded enough to appreciate it and understand why people like it, but quite honestly this is terrible. you rhymed him with him three times.

dem shots are like stab wounds in his head
he thought was alive until he realize he was already dead

also...stab wounds in the head? a lot of rappers use clever similies and comparisons and ect in their pieces, but this is not one of them. the only advice i can give you is keep trying and eventually you will get better, well hopefully/maybe.