#1
Its kinda wierd,but the verse 4 is during guitar solo...and the drum solo kinda "fades" into it...

OS stands for Olafur[my friend] Steinar[me]
Icelandic names.

here goes

The people - OS/PlanB

Intro]
Dead people talk to them...
They are the ones that hear...
They understand the living...
And also the dead...

Verse 1]
You see them on a daily basis,
doing their daily jobs.
They do everything to decieve you,
from their lies behind the truth.

Chorus]
They are the living dead,the living dead
they walk the earth like us...
They went to the other side
and came back with unholy horrors
to haunt our dreams and nightmares
till the end of time!!

Verse 2]
They are the satanic people
they live in the unholy places
They came from the underground
To destroy the believers.

verse 3]
As they are dead,as are thee
They know what you see,
they know what you hear
they smell your fear!
and they are here
they heard you cheer
sometimes they disappear,
when you drop that tear
ev-ery year..

Chorus]
They are the living dead,the living dead
they walk the earth like us...
They went to the other side
and came back with unholy horrors
to haunt our dreams and nightmares
till the end of time!!

Drum solo]

Verse 4]
There was this girl
she found this pearl
and her name has Earl
And there was this boy
he liked the soy,
but she wasn't no toy...
they look like they are dead,
see the evil they wed,
she said go ahead,
he killed him self
now look, he's dead
what a pity, a dread
his name was Ed,
and he liked bread
he was also depressed
kinda sad,what a pity
cause the girl,was kinda pretty
now the girl is married
the day that Ed was buried
i think he carried to much of a load....

Chorus]
They are the living dead,the living dead
they walk the earth like us...
They went to the other side
to destroy the believers[repeat fade out]

please rate

PS.this is our first song
#2
It's pretty good on the most part despite being really, really long, but some of those lyrics in verse 4 are just plain rediculous- 'his name was Ed, and he liked bread'... I don't think anyone's going to get anything out of that. I'd lose the last verse, and keep the rest.

Good stuff for your first song!

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#4
Quote by steinz
yeah,i thought it just had to be a bit longer...


If you check out my songs, I never write the lyrics that long at all, and the finished song still clocks in at around 4 minutes. If you want it to be longer, try adding an instrumental section in- that would be a refreshing break from the rest of the song.