#1
This is my newest...dont know on the style yet..so..crit 4 crit as usual


Broken Hearts and Shattered Glass,
are the only things left on our bedroom floor,
except for you ever since that day,
I lost my mind and walked out the door,

Going anywhere and everywhere that i can,
to get the hell away from here,
But Ive only got a $50 bill and Duran Duran,
Set my sights on a better life,

Leaving this place,
for a better future,
Even if it means,
I have to run for life,

Finally in Mexico living the life,
as my cell rings-its my ex-wife,
said she was wrong and wants to expain,
but he wont take anymore pain,

Leaving this place,
for a better future,
Even if it means,
I have to run for life,

Now Im back in the land I love,
Praying to my man from up above,
wishing that he will forgive me again,
and take this off my list of sins,

Leaving this place,
for a better future,
Even if it means,
I have to run for life


There you have it...plz crit 4 crit..ttyl peace out
My gear:
1982 Peavey Falcon
2004 Les Paul
2006 Peavey Transtube
2007 Youngblood 100w cab
2002 Dean Playmate Bass
2002 Dean Bassola
#2
I like the whole theme, and the chorus was really kickin', it really summed up the whole song. Other than the chorus, verse two is my favorite.

Feel free to check out any of the raps in my sig, please.
#3
I liked it. The only thing that really bugged me was the first line. Starting something with "Broken Hearts" is kind of cliche. I'd suggest moving that line to the middle of the work. But then again, changing the starting line changes the whole thing. But either way, very good.