#1
Sell Your Soul

Pray for a better tomorrow
Find there is no cure for sorrow
Have unheard wishes fade away
Wait until another day

(Chorus)
Sell your soul
To find blood-stained glory
With hearts black as coal
Creating another horror story

Golden lead flying
Awaiting the sweet taste of flesh
Lost spirits mourning
With so many sins to confess

All that is lost, and all that has been founded
All that is chosen, and all that has been denied
All that is dead, and all that is dying?

(Chorus)
Sell your soul
To find blood-stained glory
With hearts black as coal
Creating another horror story

Scream for the nation
Prove yourself as a patriot
Stain the enemies with red
As the bodies keep mounting
The strangers become dead

(Chorus)
Sell your soul
To find blood-stained glory
With hearts black as coal
Creating another horror story


Assisted self-inflicted pain
Concealed in shame
Nothing is left that is not a lie
Nothing worth trying to testify
Twisted life trailing into death
Corrupted blood trailing from every crevice
And finally, yet again
Nothing is left
#2
I though you did a good job but especially liked

"As the bodies keep mounting
The strangers become dead"

I though your use of words were very good


Keep writing
#4
Thank you very much, I'll make sure to crit your work soon, but for now, I'm going out of town.

(Keep on coming with the critiques)
#5
Not bad in general but the writing didn't seem too consistant. I really didn't like the first stanza that much. The short couplets sounded kind of annoying as I pictured it and it didn't say that much. The chorus was also a bit unoriginal IMO. Besides that the writing was pretty good throughout. My favorite part
Golden lead flying
Awaiting the sweet taste of flesh

That was awesome. This kind of stuff is what makes your song stand out so try taking the time to make your song run all the way through with this kind of stuff. Anyway, it's got some really cool parts stuck into your cliches and it has a lot of potential if you give it a bit more effort.