#1
Love is such a crazy game
I have yet to understand
There are undercurrents of cryptic meanings
That escape the palm of my hand
There are others who think they know
Every little secret and more
But they keep saying to find it yourself
When I ask if they would care to share

Now I don?t know how to play it right
And I?ll be damned if I make it all night
I?ve got no hope so I?m left cryin?
All?s I know is love?s just a lot?f hurtin?

I want to dream but there?s no time to sleep
When a man?s gotta do what a man?s gotta do
I?m always workin? in the fields and I got no free time
So when I get home I?ve got no time to spend with you
You cause pandemonium and chaos but I?m too tired to care
I retire to me bed and leave you cryin? in the kitchen
I see my boys for but a fleeting minute
And I know, I know you ain?t got no satisfaction

Now I don?t know how to keep it tight
I don?t know what?s wrong and I don?t know what?s right
I?ve got no hope so I?m left exasperatin?
All?s I know is love?s just a lot?f hurtin?

There are tyre tracks on the driveway this morn
You went off on a runner and left me behind
I?ve got this crazy feelin? that you?ve taken the boys too
There?s twenty eyes on me but they?re all blind
And this game called love is such a hard game to play
I?m amazed and shocked to find people who?ve won
They?re as happy as can be when I look over my shoulder
I just need to ask what I have done wrong

No, I don?t know how to play this game right
I know, Lord, I can?t make it last the night
I got no hope so I?m left a-cryin?
Love?s left me and I?ve lost the feelin?

I don?t know how to get through the night
Whether or not I?m doin? all this right
I ain?t got a clue so I?m left reelin?
Love?s just a lot?f cryin? and hurtin?
Just a lot?f hurtin?
All it is, is a lot?f hurtin?
#3
It is a song haha. A song can really be as long or as short as you want. It all depends on how much you have ready to write down, or how long you can stretch something out.

I'll get on to yours now.
#4
That was a pretty good song. I like how you said "lot'f hurtin'". It doesn't compare to your concerto but still some good work.

Crit one of mine?
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#5
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That was a pretty good song. I like how you said "lot'f hurtin'". It doesn't compare to your concerto but still some good work.

Crit one of mine?



Yes, I've just realised I write in separate stages as it were. Last year it was all about dragons and magic and other stuff like that. Then I moved onto mushy love songs. Then I started on my poems with long words stuck in them regularly. Then a brief stay in writing epics, as was the concerto. Now I'm into Blues (Bob Dylan chiefly) so for the next few weeks I'll be gettin' some Blues on the road.
#6
OMG dude this is great. Awesome. I'm not as talented as you are(yet) so i can't give you a good crit. Sorry.Great job.