#1
This song does'nt have a title. So I just called it No.2. Its about me and life. Mostly me talking, the bridge(except the first part) will be life talking to me. See what you think. Pls crit. Njoi!


Fall apart, by yourself
and i want to know why

We're miles apart, from what we know
But its hard to find a way

(pre-chorus)
But help me learn from my mistakes
And help me stay here so, I can say

(chorus)
Forward empty and never enough
And never mind me I know too much
But let me reach my indecisive ways
And let me stay


We learn our love for the son
Yet we want to be free

From falling further thoughout
Through our live's irony

(chorus)
Forward empty and never enough
And never mind me I know too much
But let me reach my indecisive ways
And let me stay



(bridge)
Wont you help me find
Only my own way

I am the sun, and I am the sea
I am it all, but I am all but free
I am the sight, of which you will see
I am the one, and I am me


(Guitar solo)

(chorus)
Forward empty and never enough
And never mind me I know too much
But let me reach my indecisive ways
And let me stay



Let me stay
Just let me stay
Last edited by Gibsonsun at Aug 1, 2006,
#2
Let Me Stay *Thumbs up*
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MIJ Squier Stratocaster

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Oscar Schmidt Semi-hollow Delta King

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#3
One quick thing before i tell you how awesome this is:

"We're miles apart, from what we know" Just an idea, but to me 'away' would work better than 'apart', but thats just me.

Anyways, great song, there are a few flow inconsistencies and some stuff can get kinda confusing, but it's rock n roll. Good piece.