#1
This is another one of my songs.
It's called, One Heartbeat Away.

"Also Checkout, THOSE EYES"


It was 2 Am when I saw those white lights up ahead
And suddenly your words flashed through my head
Now Im laying here tonight and I cant remember how
All slowly fades away and I cant understand why
I can hear the tears fall as you hold my hand and cry
I open my eyes and I can see the tears in your smile
And you begin to scream when you hear me say

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you

It was 4 AM when you heard what happened
How I wish I could look at you and explain everything
You got in your car and drove as fast as you could
Hoping to God that it wasnt to late
And its okay to cry for the things that you hate
I close my eyes and I can hear the tears in your smile
And you begin to scream when you
hear me say

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you

And now I look up at the stars here with you
Id like to tell you everything from Heavens beautiful view
(I only wish on shooting stars)

And even though, you cant see me, I can see you
And by the touch of what you do
Ill never forget you
Ill never forget you
And Im sorry I have to say

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you


Let me know what you guys think.

-Matt
#2
It was 2 Am when I saw those white lights up ahead
And suddenly your words flashed through my head
Now Im laying here tonight and I cant remember how
All slowly fades away and I cant understand why
I can hear the tears fall as you hold my hand and cry
I open my eyes and I can see the tears in your smile
And you begin to scream when you hear me say I like the content but I think it could flow a little better maybe change the lines around some?

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you I really like this. the only thing I can say is I think it would sound cool if you changed the last line to I'm only one hearbeat away from losing you.

It was 4 AM when you heard what happened
How I wish I could look at you and explain everything
You got in your car and drove as fast as you could
Hoping to God that it wasnt to late
And its okay to cry for the things that you hate
I close my eyes and I can hear the tears in your smile
And you begin to scream when you
hear me say Not much I can say here. I really like it.

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars
(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you

And now I look up at the stars here with you
Id like to tell you everything from Heavens beautiful view
(I only wish on shooting stars)

And even though, you cant see me, I can see you
And by the touch of what you do
Ill never forget you
Ill never forget you
And Im sorry I have to say Nice verse short and simple

Im only one heartbeat away
And Im sorry for everything thats happened tonight
How I wish I could go back just so I could make it right
And I only wish on shooting stars(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you
And I only wish on shooting stars(I only wish on shooting stars)
And how I wish I didnt have to say,
Im only one heartbeat away
Im only one heartbeat away from missing you


Over all I really like it. Especially the chorus. Something just doesnt seem right about the first verse though. It doesnt seem to have the same flow as the rest of the song.
#3
It's emotional, and I like how it's written. I like it a lot. There's not that much I could say.... maybe change a few words to make it flow smoother like the previous poster wrote. Nice job.