#1
I should begin with a 'Hi' because I'm new here (so be nice)... Not gonna waste any more time on the introduction thing though, let's get right to the point.

I wrote this song a while ago, it's about the last fight of a relationship that hasn't been the best. It has a sad tone thrugh it (mostly minor chords), it's supposed to be played with an acoustic guitar and a bass.


Goodbye

Verse

Take it, take it all from me
I don?t wanna hear anymore just leave

Take it, take it all from me
But once you get outside the door I?ll greve

Take it, take it all from me
I?m cutting the strings, ain?t your puppet anymore

Chorus

Now a stranger is all I see
Just go away, from me...Goodbye

Verse

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
I won?t mis your smile, your eyes, oh no

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
These walls have heard this way to many times before

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
You?r second chances has run out

Chorus

Now a stranger is all I see
Just go away, from me...Goodbye

This part is a little more agressive

Is this what you get
When your feeling lucky?
Is this what you get
When you?r feeling like hell?
Is this what you get
When you?ve reached the bottom?
Goodbye...

The sun will rise tomorrow anyway


Hope you enjoyed it
#2
Quote by cazz
I should begin with a 'Hi' because I'm new here (so be nice)... Not gonna waste any more time on the introduction thing though, let's get right to the point.

I wrote this song a while ago, it's about the last fight of a relationship that hasn't been the best. It has a sad tone thrugh it (mostly minor chords), it's supposed to be played with an acoustic guitar and a bass.


Goodbye

Verse

Take it, take it all from me
I don?t wanna hear anymore just leave

Take it, take it all from me
But once you get outside the door I?ll greve

Take it, take it all from me
I?m cutting the strings, ain?t your puppet anymore

Nice way to start it out. I liked the format you used for this. Nothing really to mention here.

Chorus

Now a stranger is all I see
Just go away, from me...Goodbye

I didn't think this was as good, but it's short and it's only in there thwice so it shouldn't be a big deal. It would be nice if it was more of a hook though since it is the chorus.

Verse

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
I won?t mis your smile, your eyes, oh no

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
These walls have heard this way to many times before

Don?t, don?t come back here anymore
You?r second chances has run out

Again, I like the format. Much more expressive here too. This is the part of the song that tells me its about something real.

Chorus

Now a stranger is all I see
Just go away, from me...Goodbye

This part is a little more agressive

Is this what you get
When your feeling lucky?
Is this what you get
When you?r feeling like hell?
Is this what you get
When you?ve reached the bottom?
Goodbye...

The sun will rise tomorrow anyway

The end is fine. Nothing really stood out here but there's nothing wrong with it.


Hope you enjoyed it


Overall I liked this a lot. Its fairly short and simple but it has its purpose and a lot of good emotion. Nice song.