#1
The sun that feeds on the blue sky
Is burning out...
It shows the time
We have to make things right

The passage reads
Of broken dreams
The lives you take
The life I lead
Is broken in the sunlight

The time has come
Lets lock and load
You pierce my skin
We lose control

This is the start.
This is the end of everything...

You had the tools
To mend my heart
You put it back
Ripped it apart again
You left me in the silence

So take the words
Out of my mouth
Reach down my throat
And pull them out
Your love will not replace the words....

The time has come
Lets lock and load
You pierce my skin
Destroy my soul

This is the start.
This is the end of everything...
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#2
Nice, good lyrics. The only thing that I don't like is the "You had the tools..." part, it is a little clishé and the rest of the song is very original so it doesn't fit together.

Loved the chorus, "lets lock and load".
#3
Ye the song is kinda based around the 'lets block and loads line'

I just thought of it and was like ' i need to write that into a song' etc

Thanks for the crit
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#5
maybe make it


You had the power
To mend my heart
You put it back
Ripped it apart again
You left me in the silence

i like it though, nice work. check out mine if you get a chance.
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