#1
Well, this is probably the first song I've written in, say, 4 or 5 months? Had a huge writers block going on and this one just kinda spilled out tonight, I really do like it and I hope you guys do to. Haven't added and lead or harmonies or anything yet, a few rough notes here and there but its pretty decent.

http://tls.dmusic.com

Dive:

One morning, at half past eight
I woke up and had nothing on my plate
So I just took a walk
I watched the road melt from view
And found the only street that I could choose
But I was pretty sure it lead me strait to
You

But tragically, gravity
Has caught up with me
And now im swimming at the
Bottom of the sea
Like a big ol? submarine
Deep down where no one
Can find me

Oh
What?s your point of view?
Oh
I know you see it too
Way past where the ocean
Meets the sky
I?ll dive

Another hour and I was free
Far beyond the lights of the city
I had the whole sky to myself
I found a place to ease my mind
Took a breath and I was fine
And found the path that lead me
Strait to you

But tragically, gravity
Has caught up with me
And now im swimming at the
Bottom of the sea
Like a big ol? submarine
Deep down where no one
Can find me

Oh
What?s your point of view?
Oh
I know you feel it too
Way past where the ocean
Meets the sky
I?ll dive
Where has the time gone?
#2
I like it, sounds really good. Thats prolly something I would put on my ipod in my 'chill' playlist
#4
Thanks to both of you, boosts the confidence to hear stuff like that.

By the way, if anyone wants a crit on something, leave a link and ill crit ya back.
Where has the time gone?
#7
This song is awsome man your singing is great this is going on my playlist.

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#8
im criting as im listening.

i think you have great song writting potential! i think you make great acustic music, and i love this song. its a real chill out song, but at the same time its a feel good song. you have a n amazing voice, its one that you could listen to over and over again.

you remind me of jack johnson.

i would give this song 8/10

keep up the great work.

feel free to crit anything on my dmusic page
http://slouchinoutfit.dmusic.com/

theres a few links on the forum.