#1
hey, work in progress here.. any suggestions as to what i could add? or improve on?

This day has come and
it?s now or never.
To part our own ways
To lead separate lives.

To hold you one last time,
To give those lips one more caress

But at least we?re still friends

There?s nothing I wouldn?t say
There?s nothing I wouldn?t do
But at least we?re still friends
With my sunshine lost
there is no sufficient gain,
But at least we?re still friends.
#4
Obviously being a work in progress I'm guessing there's going to be another verse. I do like it though but I my opinion either the verses or the choruses should have some rhyming going on, just to make it flow a little nicer.

Oh and, if you could rate my song.. it's called untitled.
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