#1
Ok here it is...my first fully acoustic song. I hope you like..If you want me to crit a song of yours leave a link..

Lifetime of Sadness

How do I forget you,
your all my memory is,
now I finally realize,
the reason that its over,
you really didnt love me,
you really didnt care,

[Chorus]
Just push me aside,
we'll go our seperate ways,
forget about the past,
n' look at the future days,

Now I sit and ask myself,
was it really worth the time,
and if we'd stayed together,
where would we be today,
but I had to make a choice,
and I said it the wrong way,

Chorus
Slow guitar solo

With you out of my head,
I had time to think,
You would never believe,
what my conscience just told me

Chorus

There you have it. leave me some crits..peace out

Sex drugs and rock 'n' roll
My gear:
1982 Peavey Falcon
2004 Les Paul
2006 Peavey Transtube
2007 Youngblood 100w cab
2002 Dean Playmate Bass
2002 Dean Bassola
#2
*clap* good job. All i can say is to ( since it is a song ) increase the length of the writing. The writing though is very good. I look forward to more of your stuff. Keep it up.. Please crit my poem.
#3
Hmm. Hmmm.....

Hmm....

I like it. I mean, when I read "Lifetime of Sadness" I thought "Here we go, another -I cut myself- song..." But I was wrong. This is what they keep striving for and failing. Good job man.