#1
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"Laura oh Laura"

Laura oh Laura im playing my song
hoping and praying that it wont be long
Laura oh Laura what must I do
To make it so that I belong to you
Laura oh Laura it's only you
That can keep my heart ever so true
Laura oh Laura when I see you
Flowers could blossom right out of my shoes
Laura oh Laura how pretty you look
Your beauty is dazzlind and now I am shook
Laura oh Laura the love in your eyes
When I am near you I feel warm inside
Laura oh Laura the sun in your hair
Shines like a diamond floating the air
Laura oh Laura im hoping you see
Without you im lonely as lonely can be
Laura oh Laura the leaves on the trees
Would whither and fall if apart we must be
Laura oh Laura the clouds and the seas
Would all fade if awat if you wont see me
Laura oh Laura the mountains of dream
Will crumble and fall down into the seas
Laura oh Laura the gracious blue sky
Would redden in despair and then I would die
Laura oh Laura the birds flying high
They know how I feel and why I should try
Laura oh Laura the bees in their hives
Will buzz with excitement if we connected our lives
Laura oh Laura a song for you
I've presented my heart now what will you do
Laura oh Laura what must I do
To make it so that I belong to you

Zoso777 aka Craig
#2
it reminds me a lot of hey there delilah by plain white t's.

i take it this is an acoustic song correct?


these are my four favorite lines by far:
Laura oh Laura the sun in your hair
Shines like a diamond floating the air
Laura oh Laura im hoping you see
Without you im lonely as lonely can be


check out mine if you get a chance-https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=407356
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Last edited by l4t13 at Aug 4, 2006,
#4
yea it is like the same type of theme

guy writing a song for a girl.

very nice, id be interested in hearing it once you got it recorded.
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#5
its about time someone posted something that wasnt some angst ridden piece of trash. have you noticed how many songs on here start with "I". "I wanna kill myself" "I hate my life". why is everything so darK?
#7
Laura oh Laura im playing my song
hoping and praying that it wont be long
Laura oh Laura what must I do
To make it so that I belong to youseems forced here. maybe it should be sure instead of so that
Laura oh Laura it's only you
That can keep my heart ever so true
Laura oh Laura when I see you
Flowers could blossom right out of my shoes
Laura oh Laura how pretty you look
Your beauty is dazzlind and now I am shook
Laura oh Laura the love in your eyes
When I am near you I feel warm inside
Laura oh Laura the sun in your hair
Shines like a diamond floating the air
Laura oh Laura im hoping you see
Without you im lonely as lonely can be
Laura oh Laura the leaves on the trees
Would whither and fall if apart we must be
Laura oh Laura the clouds and the seas
Would all fade if awat if you wont see me
Laura oh Laura the mountains of dream
Will crumble and fall down into the seas
Laura oh Laura the gracious blue sky
Would redden in despair and then I would diethis seems forced too
Laura oh Laura the birds flying high
They know how I feel and why I should try
Laura oh Laura the bees in their hives
Will buzz with excitement if we connected our livesconnected doesn't fit well
Laura oh Laura a song for you
I've presented my heart now what will you do
Laura oh Laura what must I do
To make it so that I belong to you


It is good. I'm guessing that it's a folk song

here's a link to mine

http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=406663