#1
Style:hardcore

Today's the day

dawn is coming
today's the day
we must rise up
take back what is rightfully ours

the time has come
we must face our fear
(let go of what we hold dear)
the weight has lifted (it's over now)
we must rise above today's insanity
destroy todays stereotypical humanity

dawn is coming
today's the day
we must rise up
take back what is rightfully ours

the sun has risen,
and the fog lifted
we must listen
to this calling (hear it calling)
we have but one chance (one chance)
we must seize this day (seize this day)
rise above (rise above)
take back what is ours (what is ours)
today is the day
the last day (of our lives)

one last day for eternity x4

we must make the most of it
our finest day (our finest day)
now's our chance
make the most of it (most of it)
take no prisoners
we must rise above
take back control (take it back)
regain what is ours
the time is now (now)
today's the day
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#3
oh ok thanks any comments on why it is cheesy?
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#4
any more crit?
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#6
no in fact i think we are planning on taking it out.

anything else?
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#7
i really gignt need you to tell me that it was hardcore. it was pretty obvious and this kinda thing has been done a billion times before
there are doors that open
there are doors that dont

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#8
There isn't alot of imagination. Just cliche hardcore rebellious stuff.
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#10
any tips on how to make it better? or a new title?
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#11
Express how you feel about this important day rather than use vague "take back what is ours" terms. Show, don't tell!
"People who see life as anything more than pure entertainment are missing the point."
#12
Idk Wat The **** The Rest Of These Hillbillies Are Talking About, But I Say This Song Is Awesome!! W/ Some Good Music Behind It, You Know The First Time You Listen To A Song And You Get That Chill Running Up And Down Your Spine? Well This Song Deffinetley Has That Potential!! So Quit Putting Down Ppl Unless You Look Beyond Wat Is Right In Front Of You!! [not That Any Of You Dumb Asses Will Understand A Word That I Have Just 'spoken']
#13
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Idk Wat The **** The Rest Of These Hillbillies Are Talking About, But I Say This Song Is Awesome!! W/ Some Good Music Behind It, You Know The First Time You Listen To A Song And You Get That Chill Running Up And Down Your Spine? Well This Song Deffinetley Has That Potential!! So Quit Putting Down Ppl Unless You Look Beyond Wat Is Right In Front Of You!! [not That Any Of You Dumb Asses Will Understand A Word That I Have Just 'spoken']


Hillbillies? You do know that you don't have to capitalize every single word in a sentence, don't you? Since you can't seem to grasp that basic grammatical fact, your opinion is completely invalid.

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I can't think of a good title for this song after having read it, but I guess a title that came into my head is Send Them Back Where They Belong... I have no clue, that's not a very good example, but try and come up with something that gets attention or something. My example is horrible, but you know, I'm not sure if you just heard about this, but not every song needs to have the title somewhere in the song.
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"i am so proud that by chance i am living in a place that during a territorial divide it got the largest mass of land."

hey texas, nobody cares.
Last edited by Sherman901 at Aug 6, 2006,
#14
this song isnt great, but you chose kindof a hard style to write with, so i gotta give you props for that.