#1
Well the long winds have gone
they may never return
and my heart is with them

"It's more early than late"
slurs the crowd on capitol square
ringing in my ears

And the Quiet eyes are here
seeing blue, gray, black and green
the birds were never so high

Drawers are closed, and she sits above
winking to all of us, through the stars

The path is lit ahead
and we feel so at home
going just to go

And the sun with no glare
having a soft and gentle air
as we don't say no

Drawers are closed, and she sits above
winking to all of us, through the stars
holding my heart so far, and I smile and turn away

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#3
i liked it....interesting, the flow from verse to verse seemed a little choppy but i still liked it....not alot to say really umm...well if you get a chance, look at my new song "seven years"
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