#1
ok, i wrote and like this song, and the ending little solo part i love, but does it really fit
oh, and crit on the song itself as well if you may

p.s. that took me a good half hour to figure out how to attach


edit: a little more finished and a little better written, and a bass line, cause my friend tried to write one, and it sounded bad, so i wrote one to show him up
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song50.zip
Last edited by cool#9 at Aug 6, 2006,
#2
Nice. I like the melody in guitar 2's part and the guitar 3 part in measures 6-9.

I'd like to see the full song.

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#4
very well written, this is one of those songs that needs to be heard live, lol, great start, really finish it, i would like to hear it, crit mine if would like, Moving Song (Power-Tab) or any of the others in my sig, thanks!!!
#5
With such a harmonic major key song the mood is sappy and wussy but it started sounding like pop punk I guess. And it sounds good, it's not boring.
#6
sounds a little cluttered and its the same progression over and over, but its really good, keep it up
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#8
Very nice and relaxing

like it
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#9
I thought it was really good. Really calm and relaxing. The only thing is, in the intro before the distortion kicks in, it sounds too much like Wake Me Up September Ends. Other than that, it was really good. I really enjoyed the solo too. I'd really like to see this when it'd finished.

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#10
I like it.. and the intro does sound a lot like WMUWSE... same chord progression, just different key. But it is a catchy progression, and I like what you've done with it. The clean guitar arpeggios under the distorted triads under the lead sounds swamped up, though, but I fiddled with it and it sounds better, IMO, if you drop the top note of the distorted chords, so they're just intervals played on the A and D strings, and lower the volume a little bit. Good job overall, 6/10
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#11
IT is a purty song.

Seriously, though. It's a good start. The biggest thing I think you could improve on in the song is your use of chords. Sounds good, but don't use the same 4 chords throughout the song. Change it up a little. Use a variation of chords. This may also help in writing good lead riffs to the song.


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#12
The lead part at measure 12 didnt really fit with the triplets but overall the song was awesome.