#1
Here's a new song I've been working on... I was thinking of adding a third verse, but I can't think of anything else to write.


Deep inside the dark abyss
Pouting her dark crimson lips
Eyes that burn like sulfuric fire
Her body seething of lust and desire
Seductively she stalks her prey
Alluring in her demonic haze
She draws them in and swallows them whole
Feasting on their worthless souls

She's the angel of darkness
That lurks within
She's the alpha, omega
And the original sin
She's the ghost of the goddess
With the venomous kiss
She's the saint of the wicked
And the queen of the abyss

She sits upon her throne in hell
And preys upon the souls who dwell
She traps them in her web of lies
And devours them one at a time
She dwells upon the mortal land
To harvest souls with her own hands
She clouds their minds from all the truths
And tempts them with forbidden fruit

She's the angel of darkness
That lurks within
She's the alpha, omega
And the original sin
She's the ghost of the goddess
With the venomous kiss
She's the saint of the wicked
And the queen of the abyss
#2
I really like that. Im assuming its metal, so, yeah it has like a good mood of darkness and stuff that you usually incorporate into such music, but its done inteligently. Reminded me of Megadeth a lot. A few lines looked a bit to long to fit the flow, for example I would change demonic haze (in the first stanza) to demon haze and I would take "of" out of the line about seething of lust and desire. Other than little stuff like that I really good and helps show that lyrics can be dark and demonic and still be inteligent.