#1
I was looking at my Kurt Cobain poster and just had a bunch of thoughts, so I wrote them into lyrics.

Came in with such force
Opening the world to grunge
Your new wave was mesmerizing
And everyone soaked it up like a sponge

You were it all
Shot straight up
No-one thought you would fall
If only we knew in time
It could all be different
If only we knew in time

We didn't see the darkness you lived in
All your hate and pain put into song
We failed to put two and two together
Then suddenly you were gone

You were it all
Shot straight up
No-one thought you would fall
If only we knew in time
It could all be different
If only we knew in time

It wasn't a perfect ending
But maybe it was fate
You were here to send a message
To tell us not to hate

You were such an inspiration
To myself and many more
So keep your soul around
See what the future has in store

You were it all
Shot straight up
No-one thought you would fall
If only we knew in time
It could all be different
If only we knew in time
We would have thanked you for the gift
#2
pretty cool. i like this a lot. Kurt Cobain made great music but lived in a dark world. you express this well.thats it.
#4
Pretty good song as far as getting its message across, but I really didnt like some of the rhyming. Grunge/sponge for example sounds really forced and just didnt sound that good the way I heard it in my head.
#6
nice nice nice...cant really say much more...says it all really about him, the only problem is the sponge part...kind of made me laugh...


would you check out mine? its the first one in my sig.
thx

PS sorry for the crappy crit, ill do better next time
#7
i liked it. it shows how much good ol kurt meant to people. that sponge rhmye has got to go though.
I've seen emo-er.


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