#1
It was a calm summer night
sewn into dream
it had control, or so it seemed
vague gentil images played their roll
A angry thought broke my dreams
The sound of intrusion ripped the seams

Assassin under the moon
My end is soon
Assasin under the moon
Killed in June


The window was broken
My nerves were frozen
Like glass shatters
My life didn't matter
voices muffled
and now I'm gone!

Assassin under the moon
My end is soon
Assasin under the moon
Killed in June

BRIDGE--

THE GLASS.... WAS SHATTERD

MY NEVERS.... WERE FROZEN

MY LIFE... TAKEN

AND NOW... I'M GONE!


Assassin under the moon
My end is soon
Assasin under the moon
Killed in June

(x4) (LAST CHORUS)
"The Day that I die is the day that I shut my mouth and put down my guitar" - Bradley Nowell of Sublime

R.I.P- 1996
#2
It was a calm summer night
sewn into dream
it had control, or so it seemed
vague gentil images played their roll
A angry thought broke my dreams
The sound of intrusion ripped the seams
awesome way to start . very nice

Assassin under the moon
My end is soon
Assasin under the moon
Killed in June
works fine for the chorus

The window was broken
My nerves were frozen
Like glass shatters
My life didn't matter
voices muffled
and now I'm gone!
starts strong but falls downhill toward the end

bridge is fine . overall not bad good job . if u could crit my song . This ghost will always be around . thanks bro