#1
crit for crit........................

The face behind the eyes intrigues me, its not only threatening but comforting,
and it holds me here heartlessly in an unfamiliar, protective way, like i can live my life with it, like i can die with it.

now alone in the darkness, its so cold and empty that im no closer to it now, and im broken, so i crawl away.

digging and clawing my way through, searching for a reason to go back to that place so negative and doubtfull, that i see the eyes that guide me there ,its The eyes that keep me coming back to this place of confusion.

now im finally here and theres no way out
When the power of love conquers the love of power, the world will know peice- hendrix
#2
i liked it

A well written piece of work

The only thing I'm gonna say is that i think you should expand on it

and im not the biggest fan of the last line

but thats just my personal taste

Some great lines in though

like i can live my life with it,
like i can die with it.


Mines below if you want to take a look...Its the Another Alkaline Injection one
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