I'm inclined to believe that we
Where never meant to be anything but a pencil thin
Built to maintain a seperate independence
That I wouldn't have chose for myself
Or anyone else
But this crushing pressure implies a greater problem
That I find better to ignore
In hopes of finding a cure

And if I where to forget to shower like I do
Like I did
Would the roles of my self reverse
Into a position more palpable
Hmmm...can really say anything musch here except good job. The whole thing was great, the imagery could have been better, but the rhyme scheme was unique and the flow was good.

Can you check out mine? its the first link in my sig.