#1
Well I'm new at this. Referred by a munkey and so I decided to post something. Since I haven't written in so long I'll post my first composition I've kept. Be nimble, Be fearless, Be gentle. ^_^

-My Grass is RED

Someone once told me the grass is much greener, on the other side
And when I told him my grass is green, he told me that im blind

So with a double barrel gun
I shot him on the head
His guts feel on the floor
And now my grass is RED

I used to tell myself
My grass had to be green
But then he came along
And tried to **** with me
He told me that im blind
I didn't wanna see
My grass was never green
And thats reality

So in the moment of denial
I killed of my best friend
my grass was never green
And now its shiny red

He always tried to tell
but i didn't wanna see
He only tried to help me
But i only felt deceit

So with a double barrel gun
I shot him on the head
His guts feel on the floor
And now my grass is RED

They say that denial is always the first step
Acceptance was too far so illusion came again

now my grass is red
and I finally can see
My grass was never green
thats just reality

I don't really like green anyways...
#2
And when I told him my grass is green, he told me that im blind


i liked that line, but the rest seemed to cheesy, and quick written.....if yo udont mind, take a look at my songs...
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#3
We like it alot. but the line where you say you killed of you friend needs to be reworded cuz the of doesn't make any sense. K. Thats it. simple and violent. Oh yeah and one more thing the rhyming sounds really cool. the end.
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