#1
Breathing Underwater

is it all in your mind,
are you thinking of a better time,
when you could not draw the line...

in the picture that we're both in,
and this is all in your head,
and you can't believe....

Can you breath underwater?
Can you watch the people swim?
Can you grow a pair of wings to get you right out of this hole we're in?
Can you watch the sun rise,
Where your sitting right now?
Is it just good enough or are you gunna try somehow?

in a world thats self advertised,
and you just believe the lies,
from a box in an empty room...

superstistion runs us dry,
are you lucky enough to wonder why,
people change..

Can you breath underwater?
Can you watch the people drown?
Can you grow a pair of wings to get you right out of this hole in the ground?
Can you watch the sun rise,
Where your sitting right now?
Is it just good enough or are you gunna try somehow?

little plastic know it alls,
and fake chinese rubber dolls,
from a store near you...

this is the story of the guy,
who just gave...
up...
yeah, wtf is a signature?

Member of the 'Guitarists Born In 1991' club
#2
Hey Brock.

I really like this song. I like how you change the one line in the chorus. It flows really nicely. I really dont know how else to crit this lol, it's pretty damn good already.

Keep on writing man, you're good at it.
President of the Guitarists Born In 1991 Club. PM blues rocker or I to join

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#3
It's good, I like it. The "Can you"s in the choruses get a little too repetitive IMO, you should try like paraphrase every other can you, and see what thats like. Also, the line "at a store near you" didn't really bring home that stanza for me, it just sort of was white noise because it has a cliche feel. Well that's the best I can do lol, that's a dern good song.

C4C?
We're only strays.
#4
Holy duce! the lyrics of that song are awsome, in my opinion the meaning even more so then the actual composition, right on!
And i desagree w/ the last guy, I like the repeating "can you"s and i loved that "from a store near you!
I thaught is was something fresh and new

Rock ON!!!!