#1
Hey.. could you please crit my bright eyes cover first day of my life. Im not that talented i just want an honest opinion and tips on how to make it better. Thanks! I will crit back

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#2
is this a joke because its ****ing horrible. slow down the tempo, get the notes right on the vocals its not a comedy routine song, it has meaning. Less hits with the strum pattern as well.

By the way, you don't have the right chords, and are leaving out the instrument parts.
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#4
hey thanks for the crit.. i dunno what got into me but i redid it in 10 min, i tried slowing the tempo down and tried to go easier on the guitar, it was hard cuz i felt myself rushing. I also totally changed my vocals, which ive had no singing training whatsoever so i can use any tips on that. Please have a listen to the new one named First Day Of My Life (TAKE 2) ... thanks

and ill do crit 4 crit again

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#5
Ok I didnt hear your first post but the second one wasnt that bad. Yea you could use some practice on your voice/phrasing. and the guitar had a few slips but not to bad. Havent really heard this song to say if the tempo was off or not. Ive heard alot worse hear!

crit 4 crit please
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#7
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is what I get when I try to go to your dmusic :\ thanks for your crit, sorry I can't return it
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#8
Your guitar was better in the second take. Your singing was better the first take, because on the second take, you sound like your dragging and dead. It's way too low and monotone, and still off key. If I were you, I would work on getting the pitch right, because it's really way off. Other than that, it was a decent attempt.

If you have time, please check out my Bubble Toes cover, thanks : )

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#9
Gutiar sounds great. vocals are a little iffy and could be louder but i do really like the giutar
#10
the vocals were.. well they wernt very good, not horrible, but definantly need work.. but hey im nobody to talk there

guitar sounds really good actually, and thanks for my comment on cant stop
#11
Quote by ItsJustSeb
is this a joke because its ****ing horrible. slow down the tempo, get the notes right on the vocals its not a comedy routine song, it has meaning. Less hits with the strum pattern as well.

By the way, you don't have the right chords, and are leaving out the instrument parts.

Wow, way to be a total dick. Why don't you sit the next few out there chief.

Anyways, I think your main problem is getting the guitar and vocals lined up properly. Just slow down and practice it until you can play it at the correct tempo.

Good job on the guitar playing though, as it sounds like you have it down. Your voice is pretty decent as well. Overall, good job and good luck
#12
I think its ok. Vocals need some work but i think we are all on that gravy train Try bringing the vocals more to the foreground. Still i like the guitar, good work mate. Timing and key are probably the biggest issues. Try to sing a little higher or put the capo down a fret or two(there is a capo on there isnt there?? dunno). Maybe im talkin out of my a** again though. Good effort though keep it up.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=412868

cheers matey