#1
okay, its the first song i ever wrote, n i know its alil messed up, wanna know what u guys think, crit 4 crit n be honest plz!


Euphoria
You tryin' to be alone
You let the chances gone
You build your bridges 'n' you burn'em down
You see yourself in bloodstained gown

You tell yourself you have to pay
For being all that time away
For leading to that feeling
For being in EUPHORIA

bridge: all thats left for u
CHORUS: Screeeaaaaam without a sound
Flyyyyyyyyyyyy without your wings
Buuuuuuuurn your sinful soul
And let your heart to bleed

2nd verse:
Beleiving in the truth
You think there is no use
You put a label of guilt
For being in EUPHORIA when she was killed

Hope is empty sound of the darkness
You lay your body down
You search for EUPHORIA
Then you feel the ground

bridge 2: To escape from it you...
CHORUSX2
Last edited by Sveta at Aug 10, 2006,
#2
You tryin' to be alone
You let the chances gone

i rekon it would rhyme better with 'You let the chances go', alone and gone dont rhyme very well, alone and go do though, that aside, good song I'd love to hear it tombomb22@gmail.com
- tommy
#3
thnx 4 the correction Tommy, i appriciate it, im plannin 2 do that song kinda acoustic with some electric in the chorus.
#4
What is exactly is Euphoria? I would probably understand the song more if I knew.
Its pretty good though. The only part i dont like is the second stanza of the second verse. In my opinion, it just doesnt fit.
It's difficult to win unless you're bored.
#5
hehe, thnx, Euphoria is like eeemm, like when a person in the state of being like so high(mentaly i mean), enjoyin every bit of the moment, like some say 'feel in another world'
..usually people reach that state by taking drugs n stuff, like the guy in the song who was a ****in addict.
#7
I really like this song. It has a nice flow to it and the meaning shines through. Nice work dude.

Crit one of mine?
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#9
Oops =D. I mean dudette. Sorry lol.
Quote by Keef-is-king
Seinfeld: The Video Game

It'd be a game about nothing. But it would be fantastic, better than the Sims by far because there would be more jews.
#10
thats you first song? killer! do you have music you can pm me? im assuming its heavier?

peace out
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#11
Wow, congrat on a good frist song

Sorry for the long crit for crit thing, I haven't got a comp at the moment

Anyway, yeah it was quite good, only thing I would change is de-capitalise everything.

''Beleiving in the truth
You think there is no use
You put a label of guilt
For being in EUPHORIA when she was killed''

That was my favourite bit
.Brand New.Bright Eyes.This Will Destroy You.

THRRRRRRRREADKILLER!
#13
i'll get to work making some music for this one.... are power chords aight?

peace out
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