#1
this is a song that goes from the view of a guy to the view of a girl
crit for crit

"Perspective"

"i would love to catch you up; on that date"
thats what shed do, thats what she said
we all know that she; is a liar
but you cant trust yourself when your around her

she said her options were; on the inbetween
but ive never seen you so unhappy
i would help you but not my objective
time to change it all, time to change perspective

you know your too scared to; to ask him out
but in your mind you know: not a better boy around
when your walking up all in the gym
you know you cant trust yourself when your around him

he said you were his best, whod have guessed
but ive never seen you so depressed
i would help you but not my objective
time to change it all, time to change perspective

if i knew that you cared
i would not have been, your worst enemy
now that your head's full of air
i wont think twice, of throwing you on the street
and now i think, of a good place
and now those memories are all erased

that was a story of a boy and a girl
and she turned him down in his own little world
and now hes depessed, knowing its for the best
now he found the perfect girl, to rule his little world

That was a story how a girl found a boy
in his little world they were both overjoyed
she found a boy and he found a girl
they live happily in their own little world


go for it and crit
#2
I like it, seems a little confusing when you start switching in the beginning, but it's clearer towards the end.
#3
It's very very cliche, but I can'y anything actually bad about it.

Though it doesn't flow to the greatest extent, you just need to switch up the words so that they have a stronger more effective meter (I'm not the greatest with meter either, so whatever). I like the idea of the perspective, but you just presented it in an uneffective way. Sorry to be the bearer of bad news, but I think it needs some work.

Could you crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=418403
#5
its kinda confusing, but good idea and its pretty good, but try making it less confusing... thats all i kan say abou this

mine is Another Restless Summer Night in sig.