#1
Here is a joke scum punk song I just wrote. Tell me what ya think. CRIT 4 CRIT.

In your pick up truck
you redneck fuck
You need to learn
To shut the hell up
And the preacher said to me
?Your going to hell?
Well I don?t want
The lies you sell
Then here comes the kkk
Looking for a gay
After I brake your neck
You wont have much to say


And I don?t like fuckers
And I don?t like fools
And I don?t like me
And I don?t like you


Fuckers tried to jump me
But I am to fast
When you turn around
I?ll get your ass
And the pig told me
To get out of town
Well I kill you
You stupid clown

And I don?t like fuckers
And I don?t like fools
And I don?t like me
And I don?t like you
Last edited by guitar? at Aug 12, 2006,
#3
Might I suggest a little more subtly.
BOOM-SHAKALAKALAKA-BOOM-SHAKALAKUNGA
#4
Quote by snipelfritz
Might I suggest a little more subtly.



Blasphemy! Its a scum song.
#5
I don't really like the title that much, really long.. taking it for what it is.... first verse is kinda funny, not bad. Chorus ain't bad, probably sounds good with music.. 2nd verse is ok, not as good as the first though... overall it's not bad for what it is.. Lots of punk songs aren't far off from this one, so you accomplished your goal..
#7
Quote by Derek <3's You!
Sounds like a rejected green day song. It's too boring, simple and pisses my ears off just reading it.


Greenday? Thats the biggest insult ever man. greenday don't write like that.
#8
Quote by guitar?
Greenday? Thats the biggest insult ever man. greenday don't write like that.


Well, thats why i said REJECTED greenday song.
#9
Quote by Derek <3's You!
Well, thats why i said REJECTED greenday song.



Yeah but to be a rejected greenday song it would have to be a lousy version of their style of writing. This is not even close to their style of writing. Its a lousy version of something else.
#10
okay, i dont see any relations with greenday, so peace, itsa funny punk song.
Just i think in the second verse if you say "well i will kill you", it would have a better flow, i think.....anyways,i wonder what pushed you for writing that song?
check out mines.Peace