#1
hey,
wrote this song today, an i'm unsure what genres to say it is, so i'll you make your own choice
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Last edited by Fatt Sorum at Aug 12, 2006,
#2
that was cool, it actually sounds like something a dj would techno-ize and record, my only critizism, at the end where it retard's (if i get one comment from that. . .), i don't think it should, the song is energetic and that just slows the end and i think the ending should just fade
#3
That was really cool! I have to say that I liked that a lot. The only thing I didn't like is the riff you used for the Interlude and Bridge. If you change that a bit, this song will be perfect. The solo was nice, and you made a nice song with a complicated rhythm. Good Job.

Crit mine? ('tis in my sig V)
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#4
i like it, the solo was well done, and as flyingjew said the only thing was the interlude and bridge, good job
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#5
Good song, the riffs were sweet and the solo as well. The slowdown at the end doesn't really fit though, I think it would sound better if you played that last bar twice at normal speed and faded out over that instead. Otherwise, good stuff.

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#6
Thanks guys, i've changed that finish.
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I'm homeschooled because I got tired of the corporate conformist administration.

So I have a pretty crime free school, unless i decide to kill someone.



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#7
I thought that was really good. The only thing, the chorus sounded a little weird because of the fact that you x'ed the tied note. And the interlude wasn't great. Other than that it was a really good song. Nice work.