#1
intro

verse 1

you watched as i walked away
i thought i had escaped you grasp that day
but the morning brought sweet aroma
as i awoke from my emotional coma

pre-chorus

and im sure i saw your face
and im sure i saw your face
*whisper* looing down on me

chorus

and as i lay in paralysis
you sang me your chorus
and this choking feeling grasps like this
as your sing me your poisonous lullaby

verse 2

we carried on like nothing else mattered
we decided our lives would not shatter
and like a fool i believed your lie
but with you i slowly die

pre-chorus

and i swear you feel the same
and i swear you feel the same
*whisper* and i swear you feel the same

chorus

and as i lay in paralysis
you sang me your chorus
and this choking feeling grasps like this
as your sing me your poisonous lullaby

break

outro

and now i break the paralysis
and crush your velvet chorus
and the choking feels distant now
and your poison evaporates

*whispers through appregio outro*
and im free

*let ring last note*

please crit, this is my first song, so be as cruelly judgemental as possible
Last edited by metal_axxe at Aug 12, 2006,
#2
mmm....i think the rhyming in the verses is cool but i really dont like the chorus. I think with music it will sound better though.
Last edited by Sveta at Aug 12, 2006,