#1
Please crit this and let me know what you think and if you have something you'd like critted I'd be more than happy to return the favor.

Wouldn't it be all too easy
If everything was handed to us?
Not having to worry about betrayal
Or where to place your trust?

Unfortunately, that's not how it works.
A lot of the time it's hard, and yeah sometimes it hurts.
But, isn't it worth going through hell to get what you desire?
To do whatever it takes, taking chances, feeling like you're walking on a wire?
It seems impossible to do anything honestly these days.
But, sometimes you have to lie, cause there's no other way.
So the next time you think about giving up, remember this
There's always a way, you just have to find it.

This world is full
Of liars and assholes
People who are pwoer hungry
And have to be in control
If you're one of these people
You need to chill out.
There are a lot more important things in life
Other than fancy cars or a huge house.

The people you love
Will always be there in the end.
So never leave them behind
They're your family and friends.
So **** all the possesions
Don't worry about something's value.
Focus on those who will be there
They're always gonna be true

Cause all of that stuff
Can get taken away
But, the ones who love you
Are there forever to stay.
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You are an absolute god, offspring_punk


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You're a retard, read Scourges posts. There is already a system folder, why do I need a system32.
#3
Its good. All true also. lol. Good job keep it up. Like Hardrock said. Flow needs some work.
#4
It's good....maybe you shouldn't worry so much about the rhyming
....the flow usually covers it
.....i'm gonna capture a gideon
#5
Thanks for the recommendations. Any others?
Quote by Snuffles
You are an absolute god, offspring_punk


Quote by drop-dead666
You're a retard, read Scourges posts. There is already a system folder, why do I need a system32.