#1
okay so it's only 4 lines but I ike them, lemme know what u think


I think I'm falling back in that hole that u dug,
feeling bound and shaken by it all,
and things u said and did contradict to the bitter end,
chain in hand, leash is tied, ur always one step ahead
"there is a man...
playing a violin...
and the strings...
are the veins in his own arm."
#2
eh, I think its alright. But you obviously need to finish it. I think that sounds like it would fit better in the middle of a song instead of toward the beginning.
If to live is to die, then is to die to live? Thats a bunch of S_H_I_T.
#3
Try reading the rules on thread titles and posting a little more than 4 lines for people to critique.