#1
I wrote this friday night, after putting the daughter to bed. Since she came along and her mother left to visit her family, Its been me and her. I guess I was thinking of a life I used to have, (God I miss college). I'll go crit, for crit.

Smashed!

It?s Friday night woman I gotta go
There?s a band, and a cold beer waiting
I been slavin? all week
Time to break the chains
Let go of the strain

The bars are hot down on main
The beers is cold, and I need a woman to hold
I gotta get smashed, before I crash
Pour me some of that sweet sour mash
Fresh from Tennessee, let it flow until I can?t see
I wanna be nine miles high


Aw little girl let me feel the sins of youth
let it burn, let it spin in the wind
For a night of sin, just to feel again
I know I won?t win
Maybe I'll break even

The bars are hot down on main
The beers is cold, and I need a woman to hold
I gotta get smashed, before I crash
Pour me some of that sweet sour mash
Fresh from Tennessee, let it flow until I can?t see
I wanna be nine miles high

Aw little girl let me feel the sins of youth
let it burn, let it spin in the wind
For a night of sin, just to feel again
I know I won?t win
Maybe I'll break even
epiphone LP Custom
No amp yet, I just got back in the game.
Had a Gibson LP Studio, Mex Tele, Mex Strat, Blues Deville, and mg50. But thanx to my lovely wife, not locking the door, they all vanished
#2
Two repeating choruses(verses)? Thats an interesting structure, not sure I have seen that before. Brilliant writing.
#4
Thanks to all
epiphone LP Custom
No amp yet, I just got back in the game.
Had a Gibson LP Studio, Mex Tele, Mex Strat, Blues Deville, and mg50. But thanx to my lovely wife, not locking the door, they all vanished