#1
Mary?s Way
-I?m feeling the pressure
I?m feeling the pain
It?s coming down like goddamn rain
It won?t ever stop, no it won?t ever leave
Oh, this will not seize
Because it?s Mary?s way, in Mary?s day
Oh, now it?s Mary?s way, Mary?s day?
-You wrap your voodoo round my neck
(Get your head checked)
I see this coming down at me
(Shouldn?t be that hard to see)
This thing is all around me now
(And I still don?t know how)
-You?re so far inside my head
(Look at what might have been)
You always took the extra step
(Diving at such a depth)
I always knew this was the end
(And you cannot be a friend)
-Think about what you?ve done
(You aren?t the one)
Think about where you?ve been
(I haven?t thought about you since)
Think about who you are
(And how you raised the bar)

alright the parenthesis are where the backup (me!) will sing higher
about marijuana, lets see what you all think, i posted this once, and it did well, but got deleted. um, crit for crit everyone is saying.
#2
I thought you did an exceptional job with this song, i kind of figured it was about marijuana, but in the line "Oh, this will not seize"
unless your totally sure shouldnt "seize" be "cease".
anway great job i thogut it was good and catchy a few choppy parts but still a good job.
#3
thanks, just in case people are wondering, the first section is the chorus, the rest are verses. im thinking all acoustic song.
#4
love the song.....nothing like sweet mary jane......good song.....i like it.....
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#5
A song about good ol' mary jane, eh? Anyways, I thought this song was really good. For one thing, the rhyming structure and the flow was perfect. I made me really enjoy this song. Great use of personification as well. Keep up the good work

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